Nice editing, the colour seems really subdued to me.

my two cents for what it's worth. Is there a minimum time limit? If not, I would tighten it way up. Just start with Scarlet walking up to the podium, we see from the crowd saying "Hi Scarlet" that we are in a group session and don't need any character shots setting the scene before that. Cut the exchange with the daughter eating the donuts. Cut out the Scarlet reaction when the first girl stands, just have her go right into her schpiel. And then when everyone starts going into their own confessional, cut it real tight, maybe some overlapping dialogue and that's when you can use all the reaction shots of the people in the group. Get rid of extraneous dialogue so everyone gets a sentence or two and then move on. There's probably a way to get rid of her motioning to her daughter when she says she hid it from her (because I don't think the donut thing from before plays that well). Is there another line for the camera move to reveal the sign? I think it would work better to reveal it on: "How did we all get so embarrassed about tampons?" feels like the natural resolution. Or even cutting to a locked off shot of this in the wide if you don't have the move. anyways, that's what I think.

@vicharris kudos!!! fine job, very balanced, lots of possibilities.

It's a bit difficult for me to write, my fingers are sticky of ganja oil, je je je.

@digger makes very good points :-)
I personally like the silent melodrama in the beginning, right away one recognize those cliché expressions, situation, behaving... I would emphasize that, making blinking (Murch) a little longer and then, like digger pointed out, tighten up BUT into a crescendo guided by sound; I can imagine that when background ambient is mixed in, will be very different; cohesive. The girl with the donut... I don't know... I like very much (funny like hell) the image of a little girl trying to stick a tampon in her nose, ja ja aj.

God is with you now, ja ja ja

@vicharris Hahahaha... That was great :) Image and sound, I have no issues with (makes me even more excited to get my camera!). The insert shot of the girl with a tampon up her nose would also do wonders.

+1 @OZ I think it could potentially use a little tightening up before the tampon reveal, but you'd have to tread the line of really selling the AA setup to intensify the punchline vs. keeping the attention span of the internet... not sure what the right mix is.

Overall, pretty awesome :)

@_OZ Thanks man, good points. Already dropped 10 sec since you've seen it. I should prob pull it for a bit till I do a little more and upload another.

@Wilbo Thanks too man! It turned out really well. I had Kholi as my DP and we brought in his sound guy which was awesome! And we had an AC intake vent right over the actors the whole day and we still captured pretty clean audio. Never doing my own audio again!!!! And yep, cut it down. Like I said if we got it down to 1:30, I think we would be ok. There's a plan on how to implement the video online so I think we have a little more wiggle room in terms of attention spam than the average person wasting time on Youtube.

@Whilbo Yeah, it took me a bit to figure it out. For one I have the plus account that uploads faster so that helps and I always change my videos over to 1080 since Vimeo defaults to 720. In terms of export, I make a full rez qucktime movie export from FCP, usually in just reg ProRes instead of HQ. I'm sure it helps but I've never noticed the difference and I'm sure 99% of the people who watch this, not forum people don't care or notice. The I just drop it into MpegStreamclip, export as mp4, adjust framerate, un check interlace, check de interlace, move slider to 100% quality(but on this it was just 75% since it's just rough cuts) then usually adjust bitrate to at least 10,000 or 15,000(but this I didn't touch here as well for the same reason)

@_OZ I was only asking about length because sometimes it's contractual with clients for the video to be of a certain length. Obviously it's about how the pacing feels and not about some arbitrary running time.

@vicharris Cool, thanks for the encoding pointers!! :) Is Mpegstreamclip better to use then Compressor on Mac or Adobe Media Encoder in your experience? I'm pretty much just an Adobe guy.

And I try to do the whole upgrade to 1080p thing on Vimeo too. There are times when I can't tho... Like I've done some reel edits for a handful of actors, and when I'm doing that I make sure to not update to 1080p and that the "default video to HD when embedded" is unchecked, to ensure the vids play quick for potential casting directors looking at actor websites--but this is off topic.

Great job! I think we'd all really like to see the final product once it's been appropriately implemented online :)

Oh, and I'll have to note again, your sound is great! Seems like you had really good sound guy (+sound equipment). Nothing I've ever recorded on my own with mics and separate recorder have sounded as clean. No need for sweetening to my ears!

And mad props to @kholi as well!

Mmm, link sent me to me own youtube vids.

Nice. It works. Congrats. I once worked on a commercial for playtex in NYC for Gray Advertising. Whenever people stopped to ask what we were filming they looked put off by the answer "Playtex". One guy with his date said "Well somebody's got to make the commercials". lol.

Tons tighter. If anything I would cut the line we all have our stories and come back in with I knew after the cutaway and could just shorten the beat before she says they're just tampons, I can't make out the line that is being said underneath that just tampons shot though, so maybe I'm just being deaf an that would make it work. It's a script thing really, but I would want to cut from thank you for that story to..how did we all get so embarassed about tampons, once you've seen the sign and heard it's about tampons the gag is over, though you're going for the topper with the tampon up the nose for me it adds a lot of bulk in the script I'd want to cut.

@CFreak

Thanks man. Good to get an opinion from someone who's worked around this product!

@astraban

I agree with the sign we see but I need to get away that cut at that point for some reason, I can't remember why. Maybe the camera moved too much or something. I have another shot and it's always a balance and a sacrifice for a low budget shoot. I'm sure English not being your native language doesn't help though :) Haven't had that feedback yet but I would like to stay on it a sec longer since it's a comedic element. I'll check out that shot at :31 too. Thanks for checking it out as well. I don't mind constructive criticism at all. It's the only way we can get better!!

The sound of the cup, needed, also a "pinch of uncomfortable sounds"

I understand the girl raising her arm to talk, but that part just feels strange, guess that's because I am a
rude man and the only thing I'll raise... forget it

The curly girl's "wear them proud" needs some kind of emphasis or cut out

1 more sec in last phrase "Isn't time..." or better, rephrase; anyway sounds really awkward... why the question and not and affirmation? Time for a company not to be embarrassed about tampons

I know I am entering "personal" territory but I'll give reds some spotlight

PS
I forgot most important: kudos it's looking really nice :-)